Superb haiku! Try to avoid the word ‘ing’. Choose another word with the same meaning and the same syllable. See if the 1st and 2nd lines make sense then see if the 2nd and 3rd lines have the correct meaning then haiku is perfect. 👍🏻❤️
I like Haiku because its brevity forces us to economise our words, and you do that justice here, creating a wonderful magical sense, an anticipation that something is about to happen.
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Magic of haiku!
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Thank you for reading! 🌸
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Brilliant Haiku!
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Superb haiku! Try to avoid the word ‘ing’. Choose another word with the same meaning and the same syllable. See if the 1st and 2nd lines make sense then see if the 2nd and 3rd lines have the correct meaning then haiku is perfect. 👍🏻❤️
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Thank you so much for the feedback, really appreciate it! 🤍
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Welcome, dear!
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Oooh, this was so gooodd!! 👍
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Thank you! 🌻
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Superb!👍🏻
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Welcome!
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Perfect ode to Harry Potter Isha. I’ve always written haiku in 5/7/5 syllable count. Not aware of 7/9/7 though.
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Thank you for reading! Yes, me too. Haikus are certainly an expressive form of poetry, in whichever syllable count they may be. 🌸
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Amazing
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Thank you!
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I like Haiku because its brevity forces us to economise our words, and you do that justice here, creating a wonderful magical sense, an anticipation that something is about to happen.
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Thank you so much for reading! 🌸
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My pleasure Isha 🙂
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magic for cars
non garg
park ya tesla right hier dear
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✨️
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I love this aaahhh
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Thank you! 🌻
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Magical feels! ✨
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